Each member
of my group was very helpful in helping me expand my thought process on my
paper. Specifically, Brian helped me
realize that when I got to the end of my paper, I started summarizing more than
arguing. He also told me that I should work some questions into my paper. I did
not add what questions I had or were left with after reading the articles.
Dominica noticed that I seemed to summarize and then quote the author, and it
would flow better if I could quote the author while I was summarizing. Rachel reminded
me that the titles of the articles needed to be in quotation marks, and that I
needed a title. Also, she told me that even though I tried to hide it, I did in
fact have an introduction. She suggested
trying to move away from that style of writing. Overall, my group said I did
very well with the organization of my paper and with the closing of my paper.
The
most helpful advice I received was to try to stay away from summarizing the
articles. My main focus on this paper was not to summarize, and I think as I
was trying to find arguments to prove my points, I ended up summarizing more
than I should toward the end. I could go back and review my paper and try to focus more on what the author says specifically.
I do
not think any piece of advice I received would be considered “least helpful”.
Everything each of my group members pointed out was, in fact, something I
needed to improve on. I think maybe the fact that I need a title and did not
put the names of the articles in
quotation marks are not the top of my priority list, but they are important in
the future of my paper.
To
revise my paper, I will start from the beginning. I will add a title, and then
move to the start of my paper. I subconsciously tried to work in an
introduction, and I will work through that and find ways to eliminate it. I was
thinking I would try not to “introduce” my paper as much as just start writing.
I will then move through my specific arguments and try to summarize less and
quote the authors more. I will find the spots where I start rambling and work
to improve them. I will also include the questions that came into my head before
I inquired the arguments I had to prove my thesis. I will then focus on the last paragraph that
seems to need more attention. I will take out the part where I kept summarizing
and work to improve adding what the author states. I will then go through my
paper and put all of the titles of the articles in quotations and proofread
again to make sure I made quality improvements.
Kayla,
ReplyDeleteYou did a wonderful job in answering the questions to the Workshop Reflection for you Blog. It is important that you were able to take something from the in class workshop, specifically, that you should shy away from summarizing the articles and focus more on arguing the authors main points. Your plan for revision really stood out to me, because you knew step by step what you needed to do to revise your writing. Job well done.
I did the same thing with the questions. After reading the different assignments, I did not have any significant questions, so when I wrote my paper, none came to me immediately. I had to sit and think of questions to put in my paper. Sometimes you have questions after reading something, but you don't really realize it until you are writing a paper about it.
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